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I'm editing a friend's story and came across this sentence: . He ducked as his shoulder slammed into the brick façade of the building and he crashed through the wall and rolled to his feet as masonry showered the area.
Personally I think "He ducked as his shoulder slammed into the brick facade of the building and he crashed through the wall, rolling to his feet as masonry showered the area". sounds better, but that's bringing a present tense word (rolling) into a past tense sentence (ducked, slammed, rolled). Is that ok, or is it mixing tenses?
Thanks in advance
Personally I think "He ducked as his shoulder slammed into the brick facade of the building and he crashed through the wall, rolling to his feet as masonry showered the area". sounds better, but that's bringing a present tense word (rolling) into a past tense sentence (ducked, slammed, rolled). Is that ok, or is it mixing tenses?
Thanks in advance